Showing posts with label Week 5. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 5. Show all posts

Sunday, February 21, 2016

Thoughts About Comments

The comments that are different and not the same as everyone else's basic comments are the ones that are most useful and fun. It makes a comment really engaging when the reader talks about a specific part of your post and gives their opinions and honest thoughts about it. I think being honest, real, nice, and specific can help make comments really vivd and memorable. For example, quoting a specific line in a story and providing feedback can help the writer learn and grow as a writer and a blogger. I also think if something really strikes you, or if you find something awesome and great in a blog, being very descriptive with the tone and mood of words can really help the writer visual what you are attempting to say in person.

I have think I have been doing a good job with commenting so far. I am continuing to get better at making better, honest, and clearer comments to my classmates. I always tell them something I really liked ( or multiple things), and if I feel like there is room for improvement or changes, I give constructive criticism that is nothing but positive! I can maybe start describing specific parts or lines in others' stories to help them comprehend what stands out to a typical reader.

Week 5 : Famous Last Words

Famous Last Words

After reading many different stories within the past 2 weeks, I really liked the idea of modeling a story after a TV show. I just read a story based on the TV shows, "Days of our Lives" and thought it was very appropriate for the type of story they were telling. I have plenty of favorite reality shows, including the Bachelor, which is currently running. I just don't know how to start off my story and explain to my audience that the scene and setting is a TV show. I guess I think about it too much and complicate things. Many people have heard of or are familiar with many popular TV shows so I think I need to introduce the TV show setting quickly and briefly in order to keep my audience captive and interesting.

Some TV shows I have been considering modeling my storytelling stories in the future after include 

- The Bachelor / The Bachelorette (Probably best suited for drama between a love triangle)
- Grey's Anatomy ( Who doesn't love a McDreamy or McSteamy doctor?!)
- Gossip Girl ( I already did I story based off of this series but was disappointed in my work)
- Dallas Cowboy Cheerleaders : Making the Team (Big hair and Big kicks! Definitely more of a competition story setting)
- Deal or No Deal ( An old one but a favorite one! Could be kinda fun modeling a story after opening cases and seeing what the character receives!)
Meredith & Derek 

My goal is too eventually write a story modeled after one of these TV shows and hopefully make it good enough to want to add it to my portfolio! After I read the right story during my Tuesday/Wednesday reading units, I will know if it fits one of the above TV shows. It would be pretty fun to maybe do multiple ones using all of the above TV shows. 


Thursday, February 18, 2016

Week 5 Storytelling : And How Does That Make You Feel?

And How Does That Make You Feel?

The therapist glanced at the clock. An hour had passed since the session started. The client sat on the couch, twiddling her thumbs. The client had only been expressing how anxious, depressed, and worried she was about her kids for the past hour.

"Anything else you would like to talk about today?" questioned the therapist. "Maybe about what exactly happened to your husband?"

"I told you that he's dead," snapped the client.

"I know. We've already been over that. But I want to know what exactly happened. I promise there will be no judgment. I want to help you ."

The client sat on the couch silently, continuing to twiddle her thumbs. She was afraid to talk to someone, in a matter of fact anyone, about her husband's death. The depression and anxiety was killing and preventing her from caring for her seven daughters.

"How bad could it be? I suppose I would feel better," said the client.

"I'm all ears. Whenever you are ready," replied the therapist.

The client took a deep breath and stopped twiddling her thumbs. "Everything was normal. My husband went out to collect thorns for a living, like he always does, and the girls and I were doing our spinning work so that our family wouldn't starve to death."

"You and your seven daughters, correct?" asked the therapist.

"Yes, all of my seven daughters and I. But when my husband came back that night, he had some very exciting and bizarre news to tell me."

"What was the news?"

"He said he encountered a long lost sister that he never met before. He claimed that this sister left home when he was a baby and now she had come back to find him. My husband said that his sister was very rich and could bring us out of this poverty-stricken life," explained the client.

" How did that make you feel?"
" I was caught be off guard. I never knew he even had siblings," responded the client.

"So then what happened?"

" Well, he took us to her and to her home where she entertained us, gave us plenty of food, and provided us with nice clothes. Our bodies began to change. We weren't skin and bones anymore. For the first time in our lives, we were well-nourished and happy."

"So what changed?" asked the therapist.

"Some time passed and I wanted to repay my new sister-in-law by cooking her a nice dinner to thank her for her generosity and kindness. After making her a tasty dish, I sent my youngest daughter to deliver it to her."

"Then what happened?"

"My daughter ran back home bawling and screaming. I asked her what on earth was the matter. The terror I saw in her eyes still haunts me."

"Terror?" questioned the therapist.

"Yes. My daughter claimed that she saw that her aunt, transformed into a wolf, was eating a man."

"No..."

"Yep. So I told my husband that his sister was a wolf, disguised as a human. I tried to explain to him that the only reason we were well fed was so that she could fatten us up and devour us."

"What did your husband say in response?"

"He denied it. He was furious that I accused his sister of being a wolf. I insisted that we leave at once to avoid being killed."

"So did you leave?"

"He refused. No matter how many times I begged, he wouldn't believe me. So I took my seven daughters with me and we fled. Two weeks went by and I hadn't heard from my husband so I went back to see if he was okay."

"What did you find?" asked the therapist.
"Blood. Dark red blood. All over the floor of our house."

"Was it your husband's blood?"

"Yes."

"Oh my..."

 "My neighbor walked in when I was standing in the blood-stained house. He said he had come to deliver a package to my husband, and when he opened the door he saw a wolf devouring him."

"So you were right?"

"Yes. I almost wish I stayed and died with him. I don't know how my daughters and I are going to get over this."

The therapist looked at the clock. Two hours had passed since the start of the session.

"Your session has expired, but I won't charge you. Let's reschedule for tomorrow morning. We will work through this," said the therapist.

Wolf (by Arturo de Frias Marques)

Author's Note
I based this story off of the original story from the Persian Unit, The Wolf-Aunt . The original story is about a family, with seven daughters, that is very poor and has to work hard to keep from starving. One day when the husband is out working, he encounters a random woman who claims that she is his long lost sister and that she wants to help him and his family. The husband believes her and immediately tells his wife that his sister will save the family from poverty and starvation. The family goes to live with the new aunt and is treated very well, with new clothes and an abundance of food. To show gratitude for the new aunt, the wife sends her youngest daughter to deliver a home-cooked meal to the husband's sister. When the little girl arrives at the aunt's house, she peers into the door and sees the aunt, in the form of a wolf, eating a man. The little girl is scared and tells her mom what she had seen. The wife tells her husband that the family needs to leave town or they will be eaten by the wolf-aunt. The husband, fooled by his sister, refuses to leave. The wife and seven daughters leave town, and the husband stays and is eaten alive by the wolf-aunt. I decided to tell this story in the form of a therapy session. The wife, the client in the story, tells the story to her therapist and is very troubled by the murder of her husband. I added the neighbor into the story so that someone could tell the wife what her husband is dead. In the original story, the wife never came back to check on her husband. I thought that the wife should come back and check on her husband, and also prove that she is not heartless and cruel. I chose the title based on a redundant question that therapists asks their clients. I had fun writing this story in a therapy session along using back-and-forth dialect with the characters!

Persian Tales, translated by D.L.R. Lorimer and E.O. Lorimer and illustrated by Hilda Roberts (1919).

Wednesday, February 17, 2016

Growth Mindset : Grow in your other classes

I love a Challenge meme

Growth Mindset 

So for this week, I did the growth mindset challenge "Grow in your other clases". I thought about each class I am taking and the different challenges each class imposes. For example, my principles of personal training class is a lot more difficult than I thought! The first unit was basically a mini anatomy/physiology unit with a lot of detailed and intense science information. Not being an HES major, I struggled with this unit and really struggled on my first quiz. Since I knew this class was going to be hard, I decided to work a little extra, preparing for each class and studying everyday. I decided to enjoy this class and welcome the challenges that it brings. By doing this, I actually look forward to going to class, taking pages of intense notes, studying everyday, and looking up countless of information online to better understand the topics. AND because I accepted the challenge and learned to "roll" with it, I got a B on my first test and A's on the rest of the quizzes for that unit. I have learned so many new things and I can't wait for what the rest of the semester in that class has in store for me.


Tuesday, February 16, 2016

Week 5 Diary Reading : Persian Tales


For my reading diary this week, I choose to read Persian Tales  from the Middle Eastern Unit.


The Wolf and the Goat 
Mother goat is a tough and protective mother! She went straight after her kids and brought them back, killing the wolf at the same time. I wonder what the end of the story would be if the mother goat did not win?

Smithsonian National Zoo


The Boy Who Became a Bulbul
So strange that the father and son agreed to cut the other's head off. Who kills their son over firewood!? At least the sister was rewarded and the evil stepmother was punished. Stepmothers always seem to awful and evil. 

The Wolf Aunt
Always listen to your wife! Women are always right, haha ;) Loved this story! The story reminded me of the famous story of Hansel and Gretel. I thought the plot was very creative and very interesting. I wanted to keep reading and figure more out about this mysterious sister! It is a little eerie though. Glad the women and children got away, but man does that stink for the husband! 


The Sad Tale of the Mouse's Tail
Love the play on words in the title with "tale" and "tail". Love how the story keeps building from each of the requests of the different animals. I thought it was a great nursery rhythm. I wonder if the mouse ever got his tail sewed back on?


Source: Persian Tales Translated by D.L.R Larimer and E.O Lorimer, Illustrated by Hilda Roberts (1919).